Please reflect on your news article speech by writing one well-written and thought-out paragraph. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. Upper classmen should be writing paragraphs with compound and complex sentences that are a minimum of six sentences long. Things to consider (you do not need to include all of them)
- eye contact
- nervousness
- audience feedback
- preparation (enough? not enough? What will you change for next time?)
- voice (rate, variation)
- gestures (How did they go? How did you feel?)
- poise
- confidence level
- introduction and conclusion
- organization
- facial expressions
What went well? What do you need to work on? Be as specific as possible!
If you were recorded, please watch your YouTube video and use that in your reflection as well.
In addition, leave feedback for at least two students. Feedback should be specific and original. Please leave feedback under that student's reflection if possible.
Once again, I felt my second speech went extremely well. My eye contact was exceptional when I viewed my video. In addition, I did not practice this one as much as the first speech because I had an APUSH test today. However, I believe I practiced enough where it was still polished. Furthermore, it seemed my rate was at a consistent pace and I was talking loud enough for everyone to hear. Lastly, I used more gestures than I had anticipated and felt I started and closed well, too. I was really cold which made me more nervous; nonetheless, the second I began I stood confident the whole way!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all Pfaff, I totally agree that it was cold in there on Monday! Your rate of speech seemed to stay pretty consistent the whole time, not too much speeding up or slowing down. Also, I liked how you connected your article with a personal story from when you were younger. The news article itself didn't seem to be all that informative, but you did a good job on making it an interesting topic to hear. I also think that whenever you glanced at your outline in order to stay on track, it was at very appropriate times and seemed to flow smoothly. Noiiiice job!
DeleteZach. I really liked what you were doing up there. You really prepare well for your speeches and are so calmI feel like you could be the next James Bond. I look forward to your next speech.
DeleteZach Pfaffenbach. Your speech was on target. You did very well on this one. It seemed like you practiced quite a bit for this one. Your tone and pace was perfect for everyone. You kept the audience engaged, great eye contact, and your gestures fit very nice with your speech. Your speech flowed throughout the whole story. Nice job
DeleteYour eye contact was on point. I loved the way you used gestures in your speech, and it was very entertaining
DeleteAlthough I started out less nervous about this speech, as I stumbled on a few words and added random phrases that i hadn't practiced, I definitely felt my heart racing. The organization in my notes were helpful and my rate was fine. One thing that I was disappointed in was my eye contact; it was not constant and I found myself zip between the ceiling and two opposite sides of the room. I could have practiced more and my gestures felt out of place. Maybe the gestures were just a second later than my words. I have many things to improve on for my next speech and am positive that the next one will be better.
ReplyDeleteFrom reading your comment, I still felt your speech was one of the better ones. Compared to many others, you did not look at your outline as much as you think. I found the speech very passionate and was engaged right away. I loved how you ended the speech strong. In addition, I found the topic of the article very interesting and felt you did a great job! Keep up with that positive attitude! It will make the process of improving much easier on yourself.
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DeleteGabby, you did a very good job on the information in your speech. You were very in to your topic and you kept everyone interested. You also had good eye contact and gestures, the only things that you lacked a little was practice. You talked to me about not really practicing, because you were busy, which is understandable, but next time do your best to squeeze in some time to do so. In total, your speech was still great!
DeleteI definitely enjoyed your speech as you seem very passionate. This is very evident in the poise you exhibit throughout the speech. I also think your gestures were very animated, which contributed to its quality. You also displayed a lot of confidence which definitely maintained the attention of the audience.
DeleteYour speeches get better every time. The eye contact and your use of gestures was that of a professional and I was really compelled to your speech.
DeleteFor this speech, personally this did not go as well as I wanted it too, but it was still ok. Even though I prepared for this speech, I was extremely nervous for some odd reason. That may have been the cause of not practicing enough, or because when I was at home my live audience had many opinions on the topic, which caused me to be a bit confused on what exactly I would say. I believe that I volume of my voice was good, but because of being very nervous in the beginning I could tell I was talking very fast and was stumbling on words. However, later on I calmed myself down and I was able to speak with more ease. The gestures for this speech were alright, but at points I felt that the gestures were not really natural. I had eye contact, a pretty good introduction and conclusion, and I had the audience’s attention. On the whole I feel this speech was good, and next time I will try to be more confident.
ReplyDeleteChristine! Honestly, for the nervousness part, I couldn't tell at all. Your tone seemed pretty consistent and confident to me. Your topic was not an easy one though, there seems to always be some argument over anything when the government is involved! I personally agreed with your opinion, and I think you did a great job on expanding your idea from the really short news article story to a whole speech. Everything you talked about seemed to fit in your speech; you did a great job on not using "filler sentences" that were unrelated to your article.
DeleteI agree with Mike. I thought nervousness was not an issue at all and I could not tell you were either. I felt the eye contact was strong throughout the speech. Hand gestures and volume were solid as well. I do agree that some words were a bit stumbled, but everyone in our class has things to improve on. You have had a great start to the year! Keep the awesome speeches coming!
DeleteChristine, I think you did a great job on your speech. I could really hear that you are very passionate about the issue you were discussing and you did not look nervous up there at all. I also enjoyed listening to you tie the whole speech together in your conclusion. I really agree with your opinion on the issue and think you did a really good job on this speech.
DeleteHonestly, I thought that this speech was a little harder to prepare than the first one. I felt a little bit more relaxed during this speech for some odd reason though. This time, I practiced in front of an actual person (my mother), which might have led to some of the more comfortableness. I felt like I was able to give all the information that I wanted to get across, but I think I stumbled in my words a few more times than the previous speech. This was probably due to having to expand a two sentence article into a whole speech! I'm not so sure if my chosen article was necessarily important at all, so I tried lightening it up with some added comedy. I felt that my eye contact and volume was alright, but I could probably slow down still a bit more. Bring on the constructive criticism!!
ReplyDeleteI honestly think that this was the best speech of all of the ones for the News Articles. Being a broccoli lover, I felt really close to the points you were delivering throughout your speech. Volume, eye contact, and gestures were great! I enjoyed the humor you put into the speech and I laughed every time. From what I can think of, I really do not have anything to say that I noticed to be an issue. Fantastic!!!
DeleteMicheal. To be honest with you. I really liked what you were doing you definetly had the right idea. I liked how you turned a boring article into something fun and spicy. I really enjoyed the humor twist on it too. That a kid big bad mike.
DeleteKrupo, another entertaining speech. You spoke with great enthusiasm and confidence. You seem to have no fear up there and have great expressions. Keep producing great work.
DeleteKrupo, I had a lot of fun listening to your speech and I really enjoyed it. It was really cool how you took a pretty boring article and made it into something funny that the whole class could enjoy. I didn't notice you stumbling on any words at all. Overall, great job.
DeleteOnce again, your humor proves to be excellent in your speech! Your funny introduction instantly had me at attention, and I was excited to hear your comical spin on the event. Additionally, you made good eye contact and had a consistently confident poise throughout. you also seem to have been very prepared, and I also enjoy how you mentioned your job at "pick-n-slave" :)
DeleteKrupo! I loved how you connected such a humorous story and actually made it turn into a potentially big deal. You did really good with relating it to your job in the ol' produce department. All in all it was a very good speech, well done!
DeleteTo be honest with you. I felt like I did a pretty good job on my speech. My topic was a little bit difficult to expand on, but when I thought about it harder I found some things that I could talk about. There are still things I feel like I need to work on but overall pretty good. I would like to hear your feedback! Thanks!
ReplyDeleteHonestly Max, your speech was very well done. I felt like you practiced enough times to get you through this speech. I liked how you kept the audience engaged. You had a nice tone to it. Also your gestures with this speech flowed well together. Nice job.
DeleteYou are one of my favorite speakers in the class. From experience of seeing your humorous talk in Speech and Spanish 3 constantly, I always look forward to seeing you walk out in front of us. I have been impressed twice now. You kept me engaged and I felt this topic was very interesting with the points you made. LOVED IT!
DeleteFor having a somewhat touchy subject, I think you handled it well. You made solid points and kept us engaged. Nice job!
DeleteThis speech was a little more difficult because I had to do a little research on my topic about staffing for firefighters. I talked to my Dad about the problem with staffing here in Milwaukee for firefighters. My Dad talked about how he has had to deal with protesting to the mayor, the alderman, and the Fire Chief. This is a problem throughout the nation, Not having enough firefighters. Things that I need to work on is my eye contact, calm my nerves, gestures, not being afraid of a timer, and practice in front of a live audience prior to to my speech. But all in all my speech was very good. i was happy to hear that a lot of people gave good feedback after my speech. That has boosted my confidence greatly.
ReplyDeleteI could tell you felt strongly about your topic and how much of an issue this is. Confidence is always key and something you have to build over time. It was a solid speech keep up the good work.
DeleteThroughout the speeches I have seen in this class and the points Mrs. Dennert made about how intelligence does not factor in great speakers, I firmly believe everyone can be a great speaker in their lives. Whether it is in front of a class, community, or the country, we all have talent deep within us that God has given. It is just how we harness that with the effort we give. Ty, knowing you for most of my life and knowing your dad well had me touched on some of the points you made. Being a huge conservative, I am not much of a guy for unions, but I still greatly respect the people in this state and country who attempt to save the lives of our citizens. I really felt connected to your speech for I feel more jobs should be created to help stimulate the economy. Do not worry about being nervous, I am nervous every time I have stood up there. Keep the wonderful speeches going.
DeleteI really liked your speech for a few reasons. First, you were very formal when you delivered your speech and your diction was on point. Secondly, I commend the amount of research you put into your speech in order to really get the whole story. Lastly, I definitely respect that you chose your article because it has close ties to your family and it's something that you we're passionate about. Although there were many positives, there were a few things that I thought were a little odd during your speech. In your introduction you made very little eye-contact and honestly I really think that you knew your introduction without having to read it. During your speech you did not take a stopwatch with you, and I believe that having a stopwatch can really help you pace your self so that you don't have to worry about the timing of your speech
DeleteTy, you really got me on this speech! The message you gave across was very clear and full of good information. Your voice seemed to be pretty confident on this issue and I could tell that this topic was obviously important to you. I agree with you on maybe having a bit more eye contact though. I understand there was a lot of facts you needed to remember too. By practicing in front of a live audience, it will definitely help you to look up more often and help memorize key information points. I thought it was really cool on how you could relate your article to back home in Milwaukee! You're a speaker on the rise.
DeleteI really liked your speech Ty. The way you were able to use your dad's experiences to support your speech. It felt a lot more personal that way.
DeleteTy, I really like this speech. Yo had a very good personal side to this article with your dad being a firefighter, and it helped me connect as well because my brother is going to be one. you had very good points and I though your speech went very well. All in all a great speech Ty!
DeleteThis speech was a little difficult because my topic was not easy to relate to and a little boring. I was not as nervous as last time, but still a little nervous. I think if I practiced one more time it would have gone a little smoother. I think my introduction and conclusion were pretty good. I think I need to talk with a little more emotion, but it would help with a more interesting topic. Overall I thought it was a decent speech.
ReplyDeleteTrust me Matt, I have had the same issue. I too need to show a bit more emotion, but I know you will find a topic this semester where a lot of emotion will come out. I do agree that your intro and conclusion were done very well. Also, do practice a couple more times. It will really polish your speech more with more confidence the more you practice. Eye contact was good and volume was great. Great job.
Delete(From Stephen Gebbia) Your speech was constructed very well including the introduction and conclusion. The only constructive criticism I have is to possibly speak a bit louder. I think it would help to intensify your emotion.
DeleteI don't necessarily think my speech turned out well, probably as a result of ill-preparation. Additionally, I think I could have been more animated with my gestures, as I was "tethered" to the podium. I also believe I could have improved on my eye contact, which is always essential to any speech. My outline was also extremely confusing, which definitely hampered the quality of my delivery. Another thing I could have done to improve was to conduct more prior research about my article. Ultimately, this could have been much better had I prepared prior.
ReplyDeleteAside from the ill preparation Anton, I thought your speech was pretty solid. Talking about alcohol with a bunch of under age people at a private school is a big challenge though! ha. I thought your eye contact was good though, and I think if you'd prepare for this speech a bit more you would have hit a "home-run". Your rate of volume and speed was decent, and I think you have a natural ability to talk in front of others. I think you are going to do especially great on your impromptu speech and I'm looking forward to it!
DeleteAnton, I can understand your fear of the camera, but never let that get in the way of your speeches. You had a great tactic for engaging the crowd, have a natural presence when speaking, and I am sure that if you practice a little more you will do even better! As someone who literally shakes every time I go up to the podium, you look completely natural and calm. you are a great speaker and just remember to practice a little more.
DeleteA man shooting two people was probably not the best topic choice on my part because I could in no way relate to it.However, I still could have done many more things to make my speech better than it turned out to be. I definitely should have practiced my speech with gestures a lot more because I don't think my gestures were big enough for the audience to see. I also lost my place while giving the speech so that kind of stressed me out and I can blame losing my place on lack of practice. However, I think that I spoke at a good volume and made good eye contact with the audience. Overall, I think it was a decent speech but it left a lot to be desired.
ReplyDelete(From Stephen Gebbia) I think that despite your difficult topic, you did a good job of making it interesting. Your eye contact was good and you were not reliant on your outline which showed a level of confidence which is always a plus! I do not know what your outline looked like, but maybe reorganizing it in order to make it easier to follow would allow you to follow it easier and allow you to speak more fluidly.
DeleteChang, you are a natural speaker and I know that you have few nerves to speak of, but you did hit a block up there and ended up repeating yourself quite a bit. Preparations and practice are all you require (at least that's what I think)!
DeleteThroughout my speech I had definitely lacked eye contact. I believe that it was due to my reliance on the detailed wording of my outline and fear of not following the prepared outline. Although this is only our third speech, I felt a lot less nervous going up to the podium. I had a bit more confidence. For preparation, I felt that I had prepared sufficiently, but I could have memorized my outline more so that I would be less reliant on my cheat sheet. Despite my practicing, my gestures still felt unnatural and forced. I am sure that with practice, they will become more fluid and less awkward. Over all, I feel that this was a large improvement from my last speech, but also has left a lot of room for improvement for future speeches.
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry! This post is Stephen Gebbia. I'm having troubles with it connecting to my google account in order for it to display my name. Sorry again for any inconvenience.
DeleteI definitely enjoyed your speech because it was about Louisiana and because you talked about biofuels. I really liked the sort of professionalism you had when you presented your speech. You also had a lot of eye contact with the audience. The one thing was your volume, although perhaps just me and my bad ears, It was sometimes hard to hear you while you were talking because your volume would lower every once in a while. You also had some awkward pauses in the middle. Overall, you did a great job!
DeleteStephen, your speech was interesting to listen to. How you spoke was very professional-like, and it sounded like you knew exactly what you were talking about. Only thing I would say is more eye contact, and to keep up your volume, as Chris said as well. Also try slowing down a bit when you talk (which i need to do too), that can help with the volume issue. In the end, solid speech!
DeleteThis speech was little more challenging because all my article said was "Bear hunting season has begun in Concord, New Hampshire". At first I did not know exactly how to make it any longer then the article actually was. However, I thought about Yogi Bear and Boo-Boo from an animated series that I watched a lot. It was then that I thought about merging the two together and making it sound not too bad. So I came up with the idea of role playing as a radio host for Concord, New Hampshire (yes I know it's not not New Hamster, I just did that to keep your attention.) while role playing I considered being a very boisterous radio host who was very sarcastic and of course very loud. I'm normally not very loud when I talk in public but I thought, "well, I'm already doing Yogi Bear's voice. I might as well just go ahead and be 'that' radio guy". So I did and I also added a little bit of dark humor with Boo Boo being dead. I also did a little research on some statistics about bear hunting in hopes to educate myself a little bit better, however, I didn't have much luck besides protests against hunting in general. Before I gave my speech, I was terrified, really nervous, and definitely hesitant of whether or not I could do the speech especially since it was out of my normal character. Overall I think it was alright. It wasn't spectacular and it wasn't awful, but not many people got the reference to Yogi Bear which made it a little awkward to those listening. Although maybe you didn't feel that way, I definitely felt awkward when no one except a few got the reference. I still have much to learn, that's for sure.
ReplyDeleteChris I personally loved your speech! How you started it was really fun and you took it basically to another level. I definitely understand being super nervous about doing that opening statement but you rocked it. And also, you made a plain article interesting to listen to, I know how that is since i had an article about elephants. Overall, great job!
DeleteYour speeches are creative and original every time Chris! I honestly am looking forest to watching you throughout this semester! What is there to criticize? Your eye contact isn't forced, it's just there. Your gestures weren't forced, since you gesture a lot anyways, and the volume/pace was very consistent!
DeleteYour speech is FABULOUS!!! i love it so much!!!
DeleteI can never take my ears off!!! :)))
I thought your intro was awesome as always, and you were able to turn a serious and boring story into an interesting and funny speech.
DeleteThe two main problems with my speech were my lack of preparation and eye contact. I went up fairly confident but the lack of preparation left me searching for the words. Had I prepared better it would have made my speech less scattered. I also found my self looking either at the floor or my outline for most of the speech. I have a lot to work on and I hope to continue to get better throughout the rest of the semester.
ReplyDeleteFiesty!! I enjoy watching you gives speeches just because of that! If everyone was fully prepared and confident, you couldn't tell who is a natural! So the fact that you didn't, showed off your speaking skills! I thought there was decent eye contact, and volume/pace. Keep it up!
DeleteGood Job! Overall, your speech turned out great. Youe seemed confident, but used the words "umm" and "uhh." Next time, try to be more enthusiastic or have better voice tone/inflection. But, overall, job well done.
DeleteI thought for this speech it went very well for me. I felt confident in what I was talking about, even if it was about elephants. I did take some more notes on the article online, so I felt more prepared and had some more to talk about. There were some parts where I fumbled my words a bit, probably because I was talking a little fast. I plan on to take some longer pauses so I can slow myself down in future speeches. Other than that, this speech went great for me and I definitely wasn't as nervous as the first one.
ReplyDeleteFor such a limited article, you did a really great job! You had good clarity, speed and poise, and I could tell that your notes were well done and you had practiced. I can't wait to see how you handle the impromptu speech!
DeleteJaycee, for your speech I loved how you pulled in the fact that everyone has been to the zoo, so that we had a connection with the speech topic. You did seemed to stumble on a few words, so I suggest maybe practicing a bit more, or try to be more confident. On the whole, you did a great job!
DeleteFor this speech, I felt more comfortable to speak in front of every one. I think my eye contact is a little weak, and I looked my out line a lot. I prepared 2 times with my host family, and 3 times by myself. I prepared the gestures before speech, but I was not used to use gestures. I think my voice is good. My confident level is 7 in a 10 point scale. overall, I think I did good.
ReplyDeleteyou did a good job. just remember to take a deep breath! evrything will be ok :)
DeleteYou did really good for english not being your first language you did great. Your gestures were good.
DeleteSpeech number two, and I was prepared this time! Or was I... I actually felt pretty confident going into this speech and started off great, making good eye contact, knowing what I was going to say next, not rambling about anything. But then it came to my conclusion and I noticed that my speech went by a lot quicker than it had when I times it before. This is because there was a whole section I was going to talk about, but somehow forgot! That made me really nervous and worried because I knew I haven't made the time yet, and since my focus was all on that, I couldn't bring myself to piece together the conclusion, it just wouldn't have made sense. One mistake snowballed down into a few more mistakes and wala! You got yourself an awkward speech! Anyways, I digress. For the next speech to come that requires planning(not impromptu) I feel that if I speak like I did in the first half throughout the whole thing, I'll be just fine!
ReplyDeleteYikes falling asleep isn't always good I suppose..
ReplyDeleteHere's my speech: http://youtu.be/y9wu_LD6Ppc
ReplyDeleteIt's definitely not the best speech ever, if you can even call it a speech. I feel that it may have actually been harder and more difficult to webcam my speech than stand in front of real people and speak. it felt very awkward and uncomfortable. I took a different approach to this assignment than i would have if i was presenting it normally. Hopefully the difference was to the best, but I doubt it. The outline that i created was very useful and worked well. My speed of voice felt rushed due to my discomfort of the method of presentation. Next time, I plan on presenting my speech in person.
Andrew, to be honest with you, I really enjoyed your introduction! it was creative and had a satirical tone to it, which I appreciated. In general you seemed quite serious which isn't necessarily a bad thing. You did seem a little bit uncomfortable but you delivered the speech well enough and you maintained eye contact pretty well. I also don't think you seemed too rushed! It was an interesting take on a well thought-out speech.
DeleteI believe this speech went much better than my first one. I had a stronger introduction and I was much better prepared with the outline. Additionally, I practiced more for this one. I was more comfortable speaking in front of the webcam and I think this was clear in my eye contact. That said, I did still stumble on some of my words and I occasionally struggled to push past some of my mistakes. If I could do something differently, it would be to have a stronger conclusion.
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Deletegreat job. you took a tottaly different approach to the speech. again. You seemed much more comfortable with the web cam, rather than in the front of the classroom. It looked like your notes were on your desk; next time maybe you should put them on your desktop. i enjoyed the small amount of hand movement, and the overall tone and content of the speech.
DeleteI felt so nervous when i get on the stadium. I dont know much people so it is kind of losing the gravity. I really happy with the time,but the speech is kind of crappy. I made some mistake in the gesture and the words were not match with my practice speech. I hope you all can hear it and i'm not doing it too fast.
ReplyDeleteYour speech was fine. Don't worry about your gestures and just continue on no one would notice.
DeleteBao your speech was great, don't sweat the small stuff! I thought you did very well with gestures and poise. You seem very confident at the podium speaking in front of the class. Also don't worry if your speech isn't exactly how you practiced it, we as an audience are hearing it for the first time so we can't tell if you switched some things around. Be confidant in yourself and don't worry, you're doing great!
DeleteYou really did good, much better than last one, I can tell you did practice,, and I can hear your speech really good, no one could tell you did some mistake in your gesture.
DeleteI thought I did a lot better on this speech than the last one. I practiced more and I felt a lot less nervous this time. I hesitated a little on my words but i thought I got the message across to the class. I messed up my gestures but they were ok I guess.
ReplyDeleteThis speech I felt less prepared and less aware of what I was talking about. my eye contact wasn't as good mainly because I was too wrapped in to the speech hoping I remember what I wanted to say. I believe the problem to be the fact that I don't practice my speeches at all. Other than that it was a pretty good speech.
ReplyDeleteMo, I have to say i find myself giggling each speech you give. You always start out very strong with a main idea. The thing is you have to practice so you are able to really expand on that point. They way you speak is very interesting, you sound like a motivational speaker. If you practice you can be an excellent public speaker!
DeleteOver-all I think my second speech went pretty well. I stuttered once or twice in the beginning of the speech but I tried not to make it a big deal. My planned gestures looked pretty planned but other than those gestures I need to work on freeing myself from the podium. I've always been a pretty smiley person, so facial expressions usually aren't a problem for me. I think that my voice needs to be more varied to make my speaking more interesting. It went well and I'm pretty happy with my results.
ReplyDeleteI thought that your speech conveyed both useful information and important facts, and it was overall very good.
DeleteI think you did really good at your speech,specially in front of a camera, your gesture and voice is really good, and you really telling the information about your article.
DeleteYour speech was pretty great Alyssa! It was very informative and included a little personal part to it, which I think is important. Additionally, your eye contact was great and you smiled a lot, which helps convey that you're comfortable with what you're presenting. It was nice that the article you chose applied to many of us as teenagers, and you used that to your advantage. In general I thought your speech was right on target!
DeleteI feel that my speech went better than my first but, my eye contact was lacking and my conclusion was still lacking. I was less nervous and more confident this time around. I feel that my gestures went well and I was able to speak clearly. I also feel that I should have prepared more.
ReplyDeleteI felt that my second one went better than my first. I was pleased with how my intro was and I thought that it was clear, and concise and really introduced the topic of my article. I practiced a little but next time I need to practice a little more. My eye contact was just okay, I felt, but that should get better with doing more speeches. I put in a couple more gestures than I originally planned which I thought was pretty good. All in all, I was extremely pleased with how this speech turned out.
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