Write one well-written and thought-out paragraph. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. Upper classmen should be writing paragraphs with compound and complex sentences that are a minimum of six sentences long. Things to consider
- eye contact
- nervousness
- audience feedback
- preparation
- speaking rate (too fast? too slow? too many pauses?)
- gestures (Did you do any?)
- poise and presence
- introduction and conclusion
- organization
- facial expressions
- visual aid
What went well? What do you need to work on for the next speech? Be as specific as possible!
In addition, leave feedback for at least two students. Feedback should be specific and original.
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ReplyDeleteThis was a challenging speech for me...initially I was unsure of what to choose for the topic of this speech and when I did choose one, I was worried I would not have enough to talk about. In the end though, I had plenty to talk about! Being such a long speech, I tried my best to just push past any stutters or stumbles I had, though they were noticable. I could have spent hours trying to get a perfect take but that sort of eliminates the point of a speech. I believe I've had better speeches and I'd like to try doing one in person to see how differently I speak in front of a live audience. I wrote quite a bit for this speech and my visual aid was present, although minimally so. Overall, I was pretty challenged by this speech but I was able to deliver it decently.
Heyyyyyyy!! It's the first speech Iv'e heard from tfox245!! Well kid, I gotta admit, your eye contact was great on this one, and I think you did a nice job explaining what Faith-Inc was. I thought it was good that your speech was always centered on the confirmation process, because I know that some of the other speeches may have gone a bit tangent. Your volume seemed fine, but maybe a bit more inflection in the voice, but that's kinda hard considering that it was a recording and not in front of a live audience. Length of speech was solid, so I like what your'e doing, right idea.
DeleteGood job. The topic wasn't what I was expecting to hear, but it obviously worked for you. Your rate of speech was spot on, especially for the length of the speech. Although you did have a visual aid, I think you could have made it a little more prominent within the speech. Besides that, a job well done.
Deletei feel that this speech is the best one ive done so far. it was nice to actually be able to write out a transcript, and just "read" my speech straight out. being able to pick exactly what i wanted to talk about, i was able to chose something that i felt really strongly about. it was a lot easier to slow down with this speech, which was necessary since we had a longer time requirement.
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Andrew I really enjoyed listening to this speech! Your intro was very strong and you continued that throughout the entirety of the speech. Also, I felt that you had a great message behind it. You spoke calmly and smoothly and I could tell you were well prepared for this one. Your visual aid was presented well and fit the message nicely. Definitely one of your better speeches!
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I felt that my speech was better than the other ones. But I still not very happy with my conclusion. It was not very good, right? And I'm so very upset because I did not have my books with me to introduce with you guys...:(
ReplyDeleteI watched doraemon before, but I did not watch the whole cartoon show. I did not know the ending. Thank you for letting me know. I liked your speech, you are really confident, and well prepared. Well done!
DeleteI think my speech went a little rough, I did a little practice before my speech. My speech was a little bit short in time. I was really trying to Mack eye contact, I think I did better than last two speeches. I was so nervous because I was not prepare for videotape, but I think it went ok.My speaking rate is ok. I did not talk really fast. My introduction and conclusion was good I think.
ReplyDeleteI can tell transitioning to a different country can put a huge impact on someone's life. If I went to China and had to speak in front of a Chinese class (IN CHINESE), I would fail epically. I am always extremely impressed when you stand up there it make it look easier than you think. I believe the stories you tell are always lovely to hear. I feel you were loud enough and started your speech off well. Nice job!
Deleteyour speech is very good sherry!!! And It's so sad to hear that your family was seperated a part since you were a child
DeleteYour intro and conclusion was great. You don't need to be nervous in front of the camera. Just pretend it isn't there. Just speak the same way you would when its not there in front of you. Calm your nerves and be confident in front of the camera.
DeleteYour speaking gets better with every speech we do. I can tell that you practice a lot because it sound good and professional.
DeleteI felt this speech was a very easy one for me to open up on. I felt very comfortable standing up there in front of the class and talking about my grandmother. Comparing myself now to a few years ago, I would have to say I handle things differently when dealing with sad things. I do admit I am a sensitive guy, but I always have a smile on my face when I refer to something sad to me. Was it hard to talk about my grandmother? Yes, it was. However, I kept a smile on my face because I know she is looking down on me from heaven and is proud of who I am - and bragging about her. I know I did not practice much for this speech, but I have to say I practice less than I have to start this class because I gain more and more confidence standing up there that I fell it is easier on me. I always believe I start and end my speeches strongly and always maintain consistent eye contact. It seemed solid!
ReplyDeleteYour speech was amazing Pfaff. I loved it. Your eye contact was consistent, pace and volume was also on point. I'm happy to see and hear that your becoming more confident up their giving your speech.
DeleteA solid speech. Your story was great and I'm glad that you had a great relationship with your grandma. Something to improve on may be incorporating your visual aid better.
DeletePfaff, I agree that you seemed to feel comfortable for this speech. I think that you did a great job on keeping the right tone for this kind of speech and remained solid all of the way through. Your eye contact was exceptional considering that it was manuscript and the volume was fine. At the beginning of the year I wasn't sure if I was going to get into your speeches, but they all are very entertaining and meaningful!!
DeleteI really liked your speech and thought you were able to tell a very meaningful story and you got through talking about a very sad point in your life without even a single pause and that is very impressive.
DeleteI initially thought that this speech was going to be hard because of how long it was, but when I finally figured out a topic it felt pretty easy. I knew from the beginning that this speech was going to have its difficulties because of it being a manuscript speech. Eye contact in my mind was a problem for me because I wanted to make sure I didn't lose my spot on my paper. It was also a little long. It went over the set time length of eight minutes. When I practiced I didn't have a problem with time. Their was so much I wanted to say but I knew stay within the time limit. Thanks to Mrs. Dennert, she gave me an extra 15 seconds. Things I needed to improve is my eye contact, calm my nerves, pace and volume.
ReplyDeleteYour speech was great. I enjoyed your topic and story. I think that you could of cut out a few details and made it fit the time limit. I thought your rate and volume was good.
DeleteTy, I felt you still did very well. You did not seem that nervous and I could hear you the entire time. I can understand that this speech took a little longer because most of us wanted to get the whole story out there. I could tell you were looking down at the paper a bit more than naturally, but we have not done something like this often so I understand because I even looked at my paper more than I had liked to. I still feel you did a great job and the story was very nice.
DeleteDespite it going over the time limit. It was a great speech you really explained the whole story very well. It helped us understand why he was such an influence on you and why he was something you treasured.
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ReplyDeleteI did fairly well on my speech. I enjoyed having a manuscript to look at rather than memorizing what to say, so I can focus on gestures and eye contact. I practiced this speech more times than I have other speeches, so I was more prepared. When I practiced, I timed myself at 4 minutes and 30 seconds, but when I gave my speech I ended up with a time under 3 minutes. I believe I rushed it, and if I have any advice for myself, it's that I need to give my speech exactly how I practiced.
ReplyDeleteKrupo: Your delivery was good. You have a natural talent for public speaking, you always make an impression with each speech you give.
Max: Your intro was funny. You were very enthusiastic about your topic and you were confident in your speech.
As I watched your speech, I have a few things to point out; first being that you enjoy pointing to the sky. Not really that it is good or bad, I just thought I would mention it. The other thing is that I was really enjoying your speech and was a little confused when you threw in the lyrics. Otherwise I really enjoyed your speech. Nice job!
DeleteI thought your speech was hilarious and I definitely loved the random lyrics thrown in there. I think you had excellent volume, and a lot of gestures.
DeleteFor this speech I had trouble picking a topic. I also had trouble finding things to say about my topic for four minutes. Overall my speech was decent. My eye contact was average at best. My confidence continues to grow and I feel more comfortable up there. It would of helped if I read my speech to someone before I said it. I think that my speaking rate was pretty good. Overall an average speech.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your speech. I did not expect to see a ping pong paddle but it was fun to listen to. You used the visual very well and had pretty good eye contact.
DeleteYou had good confidence up at the podium. Also, you had good eye contact. You didn't seem too restricted to your manuscript which is good. Overall a well done speech!
DeleteI thought your speech was great. I love that you shared something so close to you that you wouldn't even let anyone else play with it. I really enjoy watching your speeches get better and better as the year goes on. Great job and keep up the good work!
DeleteNot gonna lie, for me this was one of my favorite speeches so far this year. I was a bit skeptical about using a manuscript for this speech, but in the end I really liked the method. I was a bit perplexed before giving this speech after having to follow Drew's heart-warming speech, but not really nervous. I may have rushed a bit during this speech because I didn't want to go over the time limit, but I think my volume was either fine or even a bit high at times. This was probably one of the first speeches where I really got into it; I think I put a lot of emotion into it. I like speeches where I can get creative like this one as oppose to more formal informative ones. I definitely practiced for this speech in order to raise the eye contact level, but I'm actually not exactly sure how my eye contact was. I know that there was humored attached to this speech, but I tried ending it with a more serious tone at the end that hopefully got a meaningful message across.
ReplyDeleteKrupo, I really enjoyed your speech, it was very entertaining and told of an important moment. You conveyed your story clearly and had good eye contact.
DeleteKrupo, I love how you can mix humor and seriousness in a speech and still keep the audience captivated. Your eye contact was great. Your experience was probably stressful at the time but I'm glad you could laugh about it now. Great job
DeleteJust how you led up to your experience and then talked about it was so entertaining. I definitely enjoyed listening to you, especially since it was about baseball as well! And I also understand where you were coming from in having to make that decision and then deal with the coaches and fans after. Overall fantastic job!
Deleteyour humor demonstrated in the speech was, like always, top notch. you did an excellent job of keeping it entertaining yet serious. It seems to me that you have a natural talent for storytelling.
DeleteIn opposition to Michael, this was one of my least favorite speeches of the year. Having the manuscript in front of me was helpful but I still stumbled over a few words and lost my spot a few times. My eye contact was terrible because I didn't want to look up and loose my spot. I felt pretty prepared because I had everything typed out but I probably should've practiced a lot more. Having visuals was a little awkward for me because I didn't to a good enough job working them into my speech. It was alright, but there are many other speech types that I would prefer over the manuscript.
ReplyDeleteDrew: Your speech really touched me. It had all the women in the back of the room in tears. IT was by far my favorite speech. Even though it was hard to get through you pulled through and really just made a fantastic speech. Well done
DeleteAlyssa, I empathize with the difficulty of eye contact during this speech. However, you did a great job of looking into the audience. Along with that, you had a very nice message. Very nice speech!
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DeleteI completely agree with you on this being not favorite speech style, but anyways good job on your speech. Although you did not have much eye contact and gestures, you had a good volume, and were able to get the audience’s attention. When you gave your speech you also looked a bit nervous, so I suggest practicing a bit more. In total, you speech was put together very well, and just a bit more practice would make your speech amazing. :)
I feel like my speech went ok, but I wish I had taken more time to write and practice it. I also feel that I neglected eye contact and I had some technical problems because I was unable to print my manuscript an had to read it off my phone. I was glad to be able to give this speech even if I wrote it poorly.
ReplyDeleteNick, most recently I found your last few speeches pretty solid. I like the things that you try to explain in your stories and I can relate to them. I can tell for most of your speeches you have some long pauses in there, but there have been less and less as your speeches have gone by. Keep practicing more! Also, I have enjoyed how your endings have been as well. Keep up the nice work.
DeleteHey Nick, I thought that was a really good story you told. I played a lot with my brother and that's how we bounded too. If you need to work on anything it would to practice a conclusion and to try not to end with "and that's it" or something. Otherwise I really liked it.
DeleteThis speech did not turn out as well as I was hoping for. It was difficult to make eye contact while also reading off of a manuscript. I struggled with looking up because every time that I did, I would lose my place reading. This also affected my poise and made for a less confident speech. Overall, in the future, I don't think I'll be using a manuscript style speech.
ReplyDeleteI thought your speech was really good, you had really good eye contact and you were also very genuine when delivering your speech. I also greatly enjoyed your use of gestures. I also notice your a little professional when you deliver a speech, which isn't a bad thing, however, I believe for this speech it could have been a little less professional.
DeleteThis was my best speech by far. I took my time writing this speech and I think it showed. I tried to not stay tied to the words on the paper and make it feel more natural and I think it worked. My eye contact could have been better, but overall was ok. I think I kept it at a good pace and finished with a good time.
ReplyDeleteI totally agree feist! You had great fundamentals up there and a relatable topic for a lot of us! The unique stories mixed with fun facts about the game blended into a delicious speech!
DeleteThis was definitely one of my least favorite speeches we've done. I hate having a piece of paper in front of me when I speak. I feel like it took away from connecting with the audience and made it so my eye contact wasn't up to par. My gestures were lacking at best. However, I did enjoy sharing stories of my brother and I constantly trying to one up each other. It was my greatest accomplishment when I was better than him at something and I'm glad I could share that experience with the class.
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DeleteI truly enjoyed listening to your speech, and you had my full attention the entire time. During your speech, your volume was good and you seemed very confident. However, you did not have much eye contact and gestures, which is understandable, because we had a manuscript in front of us. Other than maybe practicing a bit more next time, your speech was great.
I completely agree. Being actors, I am not a fan of staring at a script - one would think we would be used to it anyways for acting. I did love your story. It was quite interesting and you had me leaning in for how intrigued I was. I am an older brother - obviously you know that. Fun thing is, he has to look under my shadow. But, I am glad you found something that you have enjoyed. I enjoyed the speech. Good job!
DeleteI really liked this speech because I could tell you were very passionate about achieving this black belt. you maintained excellent eye contact and exhibited a lot of confidence. After hearing your story, I can understand why you treasured it so much- your brother sounded like a pain...
DeleteOh Jordan, No matter how many times you say your going to beat me, i'm sure you never will! HA Other than that good speech, you seemed really passionate about it, other than the few slipped words and losing your spot, you did a wonderful job!
DeleteFor my “Something I Treasure” speech I felt like it did not go to well. Though I did practice, I did not feel very confident about it. When I gave my speech, my volume was ok, but since I had been singing a lot for the past couple of day my throat became dry very quickly. This caused me to have to clear my throat several times, and for some reason after that I would talk very fast. Also during my speech I did my best to keep eye contact, but I definitely lacked gestures. My manuscript was very organized, and it flowed together alright, but it was not fun giving a speech with a manuscript. Personally I think this was my worst speech so far, and that next time I need to practice just a bit more.
ReplyDeleteI felt good about this speech. I really like the manuscript idea and It helped me remember what I want to say and make sure I don't forget anything. Looking back now, I think I should have focused it more on my parents then my surgery. I ended up skipping part of that explanation and went into what I really treasured. I thought my conclusion was strong and got the pint that I was done and I didn't have to say thank you for an ending.
ReplyDeleteI agree that you should have cut out some of the details. Even still the message was good and showed us how much you appreciate the support of your parents.
DeleteI really enjoyed listening to your speech and hearing a little more about how you handled this recent injury. Although a few of the ideas you had were a bit jumbled at times, the funny stories you added made your speech fun to listen. Good job!
DeleteThis was probably my best and favorite speech. I went over my speech multiple times to make sure it was to my liking and it definitely paid off. I thoroughly enjoyed giving this speech and felt very confident in doing so. Having my speech right there just kept all my ideas and thoughts together so I can say everything that I wanted to say. The only thing that I would improve is my volume or just how I was speaking. Overall I really enjoyed this speech and will probably use the manuscript style again.
ReplyDeleteDrew, your speech was just absolutely heartwarming. I especially commend you for continuing your speech after getting emotional. Great job.
DeleteYou know what Jaycee, I really liked your speech! I loved how you connected it with how your dad played in the MLB, and even connected it with how a daily game is done from start to finish, I could connect with you because I worked at Miller Park this summer! Other than actually showing up when your suppose to do your speech, you did a good job!
DeleteI thought that my speech went poorly. I was much more prepared the previous Wednesday when I was initially supposed to speak. My clarity was not the best, I fumbled on words and kept losing my place on my paper. On top of that, I skipped a page in the book and didn't realize it until I had begun reading the next page! I was shivering the whole time and was not on my A game. This was my least favorite way to present so far and I was disappointed in how it turned out.
ReplyDeleteAgain you had another great speech. You are just a natural speaker with great eye contact and poise.
DeleteI feel as though this speech was a little rough. I was definitely not used to having my manuscript in front of me, and I was always scared that I would look down too much. I also trailed off a lot in my speech which aided it to go so long,which I was not expecting. However, I believe i had good volume and my gestures were alright,this was not my best speech ,and I believe I need to improve with the use of a manuscript.
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately, I did not learn from my mistakes form the previous speech. I was ill-prepared which subsequently caused nervousness. It was also too short, which could have been alleviated had I actually written the paper a couple of weeks beforehand. Hopefully the informative speech will redeem this!
ReplyDeleteAnton, I disagree, I feel that every time you go up to give a speech, you improve. Every time you look more and more comfortable. I believe that you need to have more confidence in yourself. You actually are a very good speaker. Pick what you are passionate about and go with it, you are doing a great job.
DeleteAnton, your ability to speak in front of other people truly shows with this speech. I enjoyed hearing about the experiences that you had with your cousin, and how it shaped who you are today. It seems as though you were able to engage the entire class, and I wish I could've heard your speech in person. Anyways, great job.
DeleteI feel this speech was not as good as I had planned. I don't think I practiced enough causing the time of my speech to come a little short of the requirements. I felt my eye contact was pretty good although it was a manuscript speech. I did look up a few times and lost my spot so that is one thing I don't really like about manuscript speeches. I feel that I will use this speech type for the rest of my speeches because then I wont get easily side tracked or lose my train of thought. Other than that I hope to do better on the informative speech!
ReplyDeleteTo be honest Ethan, I thought your speech was gooood. Everyone that did their speech on a sport did baseball. But you did football, way to be unique! Down to the fundamentals, you had good eye contact, pace/volume, and information which all added up to a well done speech!
DeleteOoh boy, I've got to say this was my best speech, most likely because it was manuscript. I feel that I am forced to prepare better since I have to write the speech out word for word, and I will always know what to say while giving my speech. I felt I kept decent eye contact in my speech regardless of it being manuscript, and also I think I kept a good pace going throughout most of the whole speech. I did get a 'little teary eyed' in that speech, but I guess people like that so yay me!
ReplyDeleteDrew, your speech was definetly the best out of all of them. I felt that you were very prepared, and you knew what you were saying and it was very touching to the rest of the audience. Everyone was intrigued with what you had to say and I was very impressed. Also, I know it is very hard to go up there with a heavy heart to give a speech. I thought you did a very good job.
DeleteI believe that I could have done a lot better on my speech. It was not bad, but there was a lot that I could have done better. I feel that my eye contact was not as good as it usually is, and I feel that what I was speaking about was not flowing very well. There is always another, but I feel like I can learn from my mistakes and do a lot better on my next speech.
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