Write one well-written and thought-out paragraph. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. Upper classmen should be writing paragraphs with compound and complex sentences that are a minimum of six sentences long. Things to consider
- eye contact--difficult using a manuscript?
- nervousness
- audience feedback
- preparation
- speaking rate (too fast? too slow? too many pauses?)
- gestures (Did you do any?)
- poise and presence
- introduction and conclusion
- organization
- facial expressions
- visual aid
What went well? What do you need to work on for the next speech? Be as specific as possible!
In addition, leave feedback for at least two students. Feedback should be specific and original.
This was one of the best speeches that I have done so far I was nervous yes but I did make effort to look around and make eye contact with people in the crowd. I felt really hard to look at the paper and keep looking up I was nervous and it made me even more nervous knowing that I couldn''t just have everything together and not have to look at the paper ever time. For the most part beside having to look at the paper I liked this kind of speech. I think I did good on the gestures and speaking at a pace were everyone in the room could hear what I was saying.
ReplyDeleteYou did very well on this speech. Your eye contact was really good and it felt very conversational. Your pace was a little fast and you need to enunciate more. Overall it was very good.
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DeleteLiz I thought this was your best speech yet. I could tell you were really speaking from your heart, and took time to think through what you were going to say. You made good eye contact with the class. A couple things you could improve on are keeping a steady pace and having a little more confidence. Over all good job.
DeleteSo my speech was better than most, but it still had some flaws. I was really nervous up there so I was shaking like a sapling in a hurricane. I think i did a good job with the eye contact, at least for a manuscript, and my pace was good. I felt like i was having a conversation with you up there, so that's good. My conclusions are getting better as well.
ReplyDeleteMatt, I really liked your speech. You did a real good job of making it conversational and personal. It was easy to tell that you were nervous but also that you were pushing through it and I think it made for a really good, genuine speech. I agree that you conclusions are getting better and overall the organization of the speech was pretty good. In some of your beginning speeches you would use filler words a lot but I think you're getting better at using pauses instead of ummms so that's also a plus. Great job!
DeleteMatt, I have yet to see you struggle with a speech. You may have been nervous, but it was hardly evident. your speech was well rounded and unique. you had great I eye contact and a steady pace. Your conclusion was also well improved upon compared to previous speeches. Great job.
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DeleteI think this speech was good. I made good eye contact though, but I was very nervous and was lacking gestures. I know it doesn't seem like it, but I did practice for my speech three times the night before. My thoughts were still a little unorganized even though I was reading off a manuscript. I was speaking a little too fast too. Despite these things I felt a little more confident though I gotta say. It felt good though to get these feelings out in open. I really thank you guys a lot for listening.
ReplyDeletePeter I thought you did very well. I respected how much you shared with the class and thought that you connected with us. You made consistent eye contact with the class and didn't seem nervous at all. Sharing your feelings took a lot of courage, good job.
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DeletePeter I think that this was one of your better speeches. It took a lot of courage to go up there and talk to the class about the stuff you said and as well as you did it. I thought your pace was pretty good for the most part, it was mostly the same. The way you spoke seemed natural and not forced and you had really good eye contact for this being a manuscript speech. I think that you needed some more pauses in this speech, other then that I think your speech flowed really well.
I think this speech was good. I made good eye contact though, but I was very nervous and was lacking gestures. I know it doesn't seem like it, but I did practice for my speech three times the night before. My thoughts were still a little unorganized even though I was reading off a manuscript. I was speaking a little too fast too. Despite these things I felt a little more confident though I gotta say. It felt good though to get these feelings out in open. I really thank you guys a lot for listening.
ReplyDeletePeter your speech was pretty good I could feel it was something that really touched you and you made good eye contact with the class and you seemed confident which I know was hard but you had it good job keep it up.
DeleteI felt that this speech went well for me. Using the manuscript may have affected my eye contact, however I did try to look up from time to time. I was nervous, but felt more prepared for this speech than my last. I practiced a few times with my mom before hand and got some feed back on what to improve on while presenting. I felt that I kept a steady pace while speaking and that my tone was positive. I still need to work on incorporating gestures into my speeches, and will keep this in mind while working on my next speech. I felt that my poise and confidence were there.I was passionate about my topic, and hopefully that showed through my performance. I took the time to make sure that my thoughts were organized and that a introduction and conclusion were included. For future speeches I want to continue to improve on my over all confidence and sense of presence while presenting.
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DeleteI thought your speech was pretty good you lee your pace when you were speaking.I noticed that you seemed nervous and keep looking at your paper you need more confidence in yourself I know you can do it. But in all you had a good speech just work on your posture and make better contact with people in the crowd when your speeaking.
DeleteI thought that this weas your best speech yet, it was well worded and you seemed more comfortable up there at the podium, your eye contact still needs a little help. If you have great eye contact it helps you conect with the audience. That being siad i thought overall you did a good job and keep up the good work.
DeleteI felt pretty confident on this speech as I made my way up to the podium. It helps a lot for me having a manuscript even though it probably affected my eye contact a little bit. I kept a steady pace for most of the speech and I felt like I was going to have enough time because when I practiced it at home It usually ended up being about 4 minutes long. The bell rang and I seemed to start to naturally speed up as I was running out of time. I would say overall I need to work on confidence and making good eye contact with my audience.
ReplyDeleteMatt Bremer: I really enjoyed your speech as it was very unique and touching. I realize it would be difficult to be talking in front of a crowd, let alone speaking about the topic. You handled it very well and I thought you talked confidently and clearly. Eye contact is always there and I always find it difficult to find something wrong with your speeches.
Liz: You did a great job and I think that this is definitely one of your best speeches that you have done so far. I enjoyed that you were very passionate about your topic and it meant a lot to you. I could tell you practiced a lot and you seemed more confident than usual. The only things I would say to work on is to be more confident and speak clearly.
I think that you did a great job of keeping a steady pace and it shows that your confidence has grown. I agree that your eye contact could use some work. I also think it shows that you practiced and you seemed well prepared and like someone who really benefits from using a manuscript. Overall good job bud!
DeleteAaron, although you ran out of time at the end of class your speech was still quite enjoyable and unique. I felt it easy to connect with your speech. you seemed a little nervous up there but will improved over previous speeches.it was clear you spent a lot of time practicing. overall great job
DeleteAaron, although you ran out of time at the end of class your speech was still quite enjoyable and unique. I felt it easy to connect with your speech. you seemed a little nervous up there but will improved over previous speeches.it was clear you spent a lot of time practicing. overall great job
DeleteI think you did a really good job and I really liked your speech mostly because of all the great memories and you were really confident, you had a fast pace but it wasnt that bad and i'm glad you treasure our last minute gift
DeleteI felt so nervous when i was about to start my speech becasue i was kinda worried i would end up getting emotional and break down (maybe not that nervous).When i got up there at the podium i gave pretty good eye contact. I didnt really practice my speech allot out loud but if i did i bet my speech would have been a lot better than it already was. I think the biggest problem with my speech is that is was just so short but i thought if i listed all that my mom has done for my speech would have been too long.
ReplyDeleteJon- i thought that your speech was probably the best not just because your story was the most interesting, i think that your emotion and pation you had is what made it the best, your eye contact was great and your whole speech was good ,good intro and conclusion
Nice speech, You connected with the audience while staying on topic. Do not be afraid to get emotional, all that shows us is that you have a heart, and maybe a brain. Overall I enjoyed your speech and what you had to say.
DeleteI think this speech could have gone a bit better for me. I did like using a manuscript and I think it helped me to keep a good pace. I think my eye contact was alright but hasn't improved much. I feel like I could have gone a little deeper or more personal with my speech or talked about my experience at Bethesda more. I think from now on I will probably use a manuscript, it was nice to have all the words and pauses laid out ahead of time.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your speech; you can never have too much detail. I felt that you had one of the better speeches overall, and also with your eye contact, as that was a problem with plenty of our classmates including myself.
DeleteI felt like overall my speech was probably the best one yet. I felt more confident, I loved the manuscript. I felt it really helped me through everything. I felt I should have read through it maybe one or two more times cause I did catch myself stuttering a little bit, but it was probably my smoothest one yet.
ReplyDeleteJon: your speech literally made the room go silent during and for the next 10 minutes until the bell rang. Your passion and description showed how much you truly cared about your topic. I was literally shaking all next hour. You were confident, and I liked how you shared a deep story that not many people knew about. Well done.
Hailey- your speech from the beginning grabbed my attention. You, kind of like jon, had passion about what you were speaking about. You were extremely confident, had great eye contact, and had the right amount of funny and serious. Bravo
this was probably the hardest speech I have done.I probably practice more times than I should have, but no matter how many times I practiced I still closed my eyes and flashbacked every time I talked about looking under the science table.I didn't remember making any hand gestures except for the one where I pounded on the desk, but I don't know why I did that as it was not planned. also did not realize that I still do with my hands behind my back the entire time. I fumbled around with my manuscript, which was somewhat distracting. the tempo of the speech and my rate of speaking was incredibly fast that at times it was difficult to spit out the words and enunciate them correctly. at times I had alright I contact and at other times my eye contact was non-existent.the content of my speech was amazing in my opinion, but I struggled to keep my composure.overall, this speech could have been a lot better, but than again it could have been worse.
ReplyDeleteJon you did a really great job with your speech you had a fast pace but you warned us of that and it was something you really cared about and it seemed tough to talk about and im glad you shared that experience with us... great speech
DeleteHonestly if you do not get a star up on her wall for your speech I will cry. When you were getting to the end of your speech I could not stop listening, you were getting faster, and redder, and running out of breath. I was in your place in your school, I was seeing everything you were describing and it was just intense. I could not believe how good of a speech you did, but I was kind of expecting something like that from you.
DeleteJon all I have to say is wow, just wow. I respect how much you shared with us, and all through your speech I didn't know whether to cry, or to stay silent in shock. It was a good speech though. I liked it a lot. My advice is to keep digging like that, because the deeper you dig the more you find your voice.
DeleteJon all I have to say is wow, just wow. I respect how much you shared with us, and all through your speech I didn't know whether to cry, or to stay silent in shock. It was a good speech though. I liked it a lot. My advice is to keep digging like that, because the deeper you dig the more you find your voice.
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DeleteJon your speech was very powerful. You seemed to almost know the whole speech by heart, and a lot of practice I thought was put into your speech. I think that the only way you could of done it better was that if you were allowed more time to say your speech. Other than that your speech was very good.
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ReplyDeleteThis speech was the most difficult for me to write. I had to practice a bunch in order for me to get through the speech. I think that I did well with this speech. Eye contact was good even with it being a manuscript, I was also able to keep a good pace and volume during the whole thing as well. I need to work on hand gestures, even when they were written into the speech I still kept forgetting about them.
Your speech was filled with emotion, which I really enjoyed; also your speech was filled with detail, which I also enjoyed. I applaud you for talking about this serious and sad topic, but I am glad that you were able to talk to us about this topic.
DeleteI was not really prepared for my speech at all I basically forgot bout it and I also forgot to dress up I think my speech was ok though I said all that i wanted to say but i didn't read it off the manuscript because I really wasn't comfortable with that Overall I think I did alright and I would just practice more if I could redo it.
ReplyDeleteThis speech was not enjoyable for me, ill tell you why. First off it may seem all dandy that you will know what you will say, but for me, eye contact was not a strong point. I also felt I could not really connect with the audience when the speech was on something I treasured. I tried putting a different spin on the speech while trying to make it sound like a bedtime story with castles and such. For my “object” that I was suppose to bring in, I had in mind that my scar on my eyebrow would be enough, but I guess not. To my previous statement, it will be with me forever and with that it reminds me of my sister, and she was my main topic of this speech Overall, no more manuscripts and have a nice day.
ReplyDeleteI did not like my treasure speech because I did not really practice it at all. I forgot about it until the morning it was due and I only had enough written down for about two minutes. After I finished it I read it over only once, and then I still had to get my visual aid. After I had everything ready I was one of the first people to go. I felt like I was all over the place when I was reading off my manuscript, and it sounded a lot better when I was typing it out. I wish I would have actually prepared myself for it more.
ReplyDeleteDaniel, your speech was touching. It was really cool what you shared with us, and even though you were ill prepared it was still a good speech.
DeleteDaniel, your speech was touching. It was really cool what you shared with us, and even though you were ill prepared it was still a good speech.
DeleteI thought you did better than you think. all it need was a little practice like you said but it had good content
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ReplyDeleteI liked your speech a lot because you picked something that has been with you for years, and through a lot of events and moments with you. Your speech was well organized, and it was easy to follow. Your pace was good overall too, and your a pretty confident speaker. I also like the watermelon color of the shoes, it was funny when you brought it up because you were so proud of the color. A lot of other people liked your speech too, good job.
I thought my speech went okay. It was kind of tough talking about that subject, because it's a very touchy subject for me. But in terms of the actual speech, it went okay. My eye contact was kind of poor due to the fact that it was a manuscript speech. My pace was pretty good. I felt like my posture and poise while I was speaking helped me remain confident while I was speaking. Overall, I think it went pretty good.
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ReplyDeleteYour speech was pretty good bruh. I know it was pretty tough for you to talk about what you talked about, but you made light of the situation, and delivered a pretty strong speech. It was kind of obvious that you didn't parctice, but other than that, your eye contact and pacing was pretty good.
I thought my speech went well. I really enjoyed writing this speech because it really is something of great importance to me. I was also well prepared for this speech.
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